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Slowly into darkness he descends,
All alone, no one he loves is there.
Patches of carpet stained by the tears.
Hiding under a blanket of dispair.
He lives in fear of footsteps.
Shivering when they come his way.
Engulfed by the cloak of the dark,
Longing for the light of day.
She covers her face with concern.
Pretends she doesn't see him cry.
A hand falls onto his face.
She gives him a kick goodbye.
He's drowning in a crimson pool.
Choking on his own red sea.
The final blow was all he could take.
Soon he will no longer be.
She opens the door again.
Not a tear and not a drop of her head.
No one knows her true nature,
And no reason for why he's dead.
©2006-2009 ~darklair666
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Not submitted for a while, but I wrote this ages ago. I lost my poetry book.

Well, everybody writes about abuse and suicide. I thought I'd take a look at it. I usually write about morbid stuff, but I hardly ever use a rhyme scheme when being so serious. I think it sets a depressing mood to the poem, the rhyme scheme as well as the language devices I used (My God, you can tell I'm doing unseen poetry in GCSE English, can't you?).

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Awww.... I'm not.... GONNA....*Breaks down with kleenex* That is really sad. But I think you have a typo. ^__^;

"Engulfed bu the cloak of the dark"


It's really great, keep it up!

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thanks dudette. I'm off to correct that.

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^_^ Cough cough ...TATTOOED... Cough... k MILLIONAIRES... Cough... Nasty cough I've got here.... ^_^

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